Here’s a review of your “Velvet Nights” chorus:
Strengths:
Imagery: The phrase “velvet nights” beautifully evokes a soft, luxurious, and intimate atmosphere—very fitting for RnB.
Mood: The chorus has a smooth, romantic vibe that’s easy to feel and imagine.
Flow: The lines flow well with gentle rhythm, perfect for a slow jam.
Emotion: There’s a subtle longing and warmth in the words that fit RnB’s emotional style.
Suggestions for improvement:
Uniqueness: Maybe add a unique metaphor or twist to make it stand out even more? For example, something that connects “velvet nights” to a specific feeling or memory.
Rhythmic variation: Consider adding some rhythmic variation or a slight internal rhyme to make it even catchier.
More sensory details: You could sprinkle in a couple more sensory details—like scents, sounds, or textures—to deepen the mood.
If you want, I can help you rewrite or expand it with these ideas! Would you like me to try?
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